Digression isn't always wrong in a college admissions essay. Sometimes a colorful aside or anecdote can help engage the reader and enhance the reading experience. However, digression adds little to an essay other than extraneous words in many cases.  Make sure the deviation serves a legitimate purpose in your essay, whenever you deviate from your main point. Be careful to avoid overusing flowery language when writing your admissions essay. Too many adjectives and adverbs can ruin the reading experience. Several of the later tips in this article are about using strong verbs. Read them. Strong verbs, not adjectives and adverbs, are what will make your admissions essay come to life.  The admissions folks will quickly feel like they are in the presence of an immature writer who is trying too hard to impress them when an essay has two or three adjectives or adverbs in every sentence. The majority of adjectives and adverbs (especially adverbs) can be cut if the verbs (the action words) of the passage are chosen well. The revision focuses more on making a point, not melodrama.  Think about what you are trying to accomplish with your college admissions essay: you want to grab your readers' attention and keep them engaged. Lots of adjectives and adverbs often make prose seem wordy, fluffy and over-written. Strong verbs animate prose.

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 In case the majority of your sentences rely on "to be," however, you're sapping your essay of energy. Every sentence uses the verb "to be." The passage has no grammatical errors, but it flops on the stylistic front. Teaching students to recognize passive voice in their essays is one of the more challenging tasks I've faced as a writing instructor. Passive voice is not a grammatical error, but overuse can lead to essays that are wordy, confusing and unengaging. You need to map out a sentence and identify the subject, verb and object to identify passive voice. The result is a sentence in which the thing performing the action of the sentence is either missing or tacked onto the end of the sentence.   There are even times when you will want to use it and the passive voice again is not a grammatical error. You may want to put it in the subject position in a sentence in case you are trying to emphasize the object of a sentence.  For example, let's say a beautiful 300-year-old tree in your front yard was destroyed by lightning. You probably want to emphasize the tree, not the lightning in case you write about the event. Expletive constructions involve a couple of the stylistic errors outlined in this article -- they are wordy and employ weak verbs. Many (but not all) sentences that begin with "it is," "it was," "there is" or "there are" have expletive constructions. An expletive construction begins with the empty word "there" or "it" (sometimes called a filler subject) in general. In an expletive construction, the word "there" or "it" is not functioning as a pronoun.